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Teen Poetry #7

Storybook Life

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-08-06 09:22 PM

In the flicker of candle light
I can see the questions in your eyes
And it kills me because I dont have the answers

Your voice sounds so sad
Like you gave up on life
But that cant happen
Because its all I can ever care about

At he same time
I can hear a tinge of hope in your voice
So even if I cant find it, I know theres a reluctant hope
With a storybook ending, where everything will be okay

Even though you hide your emotion
That sets you aside from all the rest
I can see it in your smile
And I can hear it in your words

So scream out all your anger
That will bleed away the pain
In this storybook life

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-08-07 09:59 PM

"In the flicker of candle light
I can see the questions in your eyes
And it kills me because I dont have the answers"

This poem was very good. It's not my favorite by you but I did enjoy it. I absolutly loved the first stanza. It explains knowing something's wrong and not being able to do anything about it. A situation I find myself in often. Great job.

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-08-09 09:15 PM

So scream out all your anger
That will bleed away the pain
In this storybook life
Wow i liked this part it was a good ending.....
Krysti*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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