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Teen Poetry #7

twist and turn

Artofmark
Junior Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 41

0 posted 2006-08-06 04:28 PM

My eyes twist and turn as they where a windmill,
but i dislike the feeling I feel i wish all was still,
my mind wanders as thou it is a lost,
I can not grasp my thoughts
thoughts moving like cars in traffic
but a thought that does not move
for it is there steadfast and unwavering
for it is beauty, for it is you
even wit the mayhem and clutter
i never lose sight of you
in my thoughts even confused
it is like a picture all distorted, but
one thing i see clearly is you.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-08-09 02:14 AM

"I can not grasp my thoughts
thoughts moving like cars in traffic
but a thought that does not move
for it is there steadfast and unwavering
for it is beauty, for it is you"

This is my favorite part in the whole poem, well, this and the ending two lines, but this part in particular. I loved the warring emotions you see in this piece, the contradictions really added a lot to this poem.

I think you did a great job with this poem and I know that it was a pleasure for me to read. I hope that you will continue to post more poems in the near future and thanks for sharing

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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David D Jerald
Member

since 2006-08-07

Posts 74
Tucson, Arizona

2 posted 2006-08-09 03:14 AM

Hey Art Yea Love sure does that to you ya, lust to. Pretty good poem
Dave

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