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Teen Poetry #7

beautifully sad

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-08-04 12:45 PM

bright shades
of grace
touch his face
as the
stars hide
in soft expression
behind his
sad eyes

dwelling in
translucent
soft light
they reveal
the drab onus
haunting his heart

heaven cries
golden comets
glittering his soul
in perfect
angelic halo

...and the stars
no longer
hide they
forever shine
within his
beautiful eyes

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2006-08-04 01:19 PM

nicely done!

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-08-04 04:57 PM

The ending and the start has to be my favorite part in the whole poem! It's such a sweet poem! I loved the stars comparison.

Umm... I'm not sure if you put "express" as the correct word or not but I think it should be "expression"...

Anyway, great job on this poem, it was and is an excellent write

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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2006-08-04 06:05 PM

thanks y'all! oh, stargal, you're right, it is supposed to be expression, i typed that wrong..im sorry. i'll change that. thanks for the replies..

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

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