Teen Poetry #7 |
I Wake Up |
WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
I wake up, on top of the blanket, Get up, turn off the alarm. To tell the truth, I didn’t think I’d make it To sleep, without you to keep me warm. I wanna crawl back under the covers, But the clock tells me I’m late. I wonder if you found another lover After you left here so very irate. I take a quick, cold shower, I won’t let myself cry anymore. Decide not to give you that power, As I pick up my jeans off the floor. Look in the mirror to fix my hair, Put on a little mascara. I stub my toe, I stop to swear, Just want to get to work THIS era! I’ll admit, last night I had a drink, And passed out onto bed. I needed to pull myself from that brink, The brink of wishing you were dead. I got to work late, but that’s okay, The boss says she’ll give me another chance. And tomorrow’s a brand new day, The day I’m giving up on romance. Yes, today’s the last day I’ll think about love, I think as I drive home at seven. I don’t do anything drastic that I know of, Crawl under the covers at about eleven. I won’t think of you, or the way you left me, The way it ended, the way it hurt. Of you, I’m finally free, Except that I’m sleeping in your sweatshirt. I wake up, push away the covers, Get up, turn off the alarm. To my surprise I discover, I didn’t need you to keep me warm. ~not sure about this one...~ When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me. |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
THis was REALLY GOOD! I love the structure of going through the day...and then the sudden realization. Keep it up! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, I'm not sure about this one. In some ways I like the narrator kind of style to it but in others I don't. It's almost, I say almost because it's not quite, almost, emotionless to me, no offence. Yet, I kind of like how you step back and talk your way through the day, it gives this an interesting edge. I do like how you start out with a blue feeling and end up giving us hope in the end. That kind of poem just makes me smile! This was no exception. Thanks for sharing @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow i liked this a lot it had such a nice flow and i loved the rhyming i loved it hope to read more from you soon.....good write hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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