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rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
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0 posted 2006-07-29 12:13 PM


i also wrote this a while ago, i am getting ready to move to a foreign country for a year and i am going thru my writings, i just found a bunch i havent looked at in a while


No longer will the towers outline
stick up tall against the horizon
Never again will many a family be together
Too many of innocents met their,
Death, on that lazy morning
Four of ours hit without warning
planes meant for the pentagon, capitol and towers
hit, strong and disguised
we were, us all amazed enraged and surprised,
The people in them gone not found, for them on empty graves lay flowers
Many of the dead we have yet to find them
Heartbreak hitting each family, as loved ones don’t come home this night again
Firefighters police, heroes
When asked to help, risk their lives, they didn’t stop didn’t say no
One day after another our whole country held our breath
hoping, hoping not everyone had ended in death
that maybe our loved ones would be survivors
when others died we hoped , that while many died our loved ones would survive.
And to whom do we owe  to what we feel
‘Bush his administrations who didn’t think the threats were real
to the al Qaeda who attacked us first
The one who built those buildings, unknowing to come this hurt?
I think not, we really can only blame ourselves
We were not ready for such a thing to in our future delve
No one thought to wonder
What happens really if terrorists hit that building yonder
Are able and ready to cope
Or are we not to scared to vote
To protect our country keep it safe
Although now it’s all to late
3,ooo people died in the attacks
No longer do they walk the earth
No longer here from birth
for them I remember
of the attacks that September.


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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-07-29 12:17 PM


Hey rhia,

I think that it’s great you have written poems about 9/11, I have always wondered why I haven’t seen any of those, but I guess since it’s 2006 nobody is thinking to write them now… Which is sad, because we all need a reminder of what went on that day.

Okay, as much as I love “old” English, I would suggest, as if I had any good suggestions, what you don’t use “yonder” in an otherwise modern poem. The word looks kind of out of place by itself, I know that isn’t any big deal but that’s just what I think…

Anyway, great poem, and thank you for the reminder of that day, I hope that this year when it comes back around again others might really, really, remember that day, take a moment to think about it. I know that you’ve got me thinking once again of those who died…

Thanks for that reminder

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