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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
i also wrote this a while ago, i am getting ready to move to a foreign country for a year and i am going thru my writings, i just found a bunch i havent looked at in a while No longer will the towers outline stick up tall against the horizon Never again will many a family be together Too many of innocents met their, Death, on that lazy morning Four of ours hit without warning planes meant for the pentagon, capitol and towers hit, strong and disguised we were, us all amazed enraged and surprised, The people in them gone not found, for them on empty graves lay flowers Many of the dead we have yet to find them Heartbreak hitting each family, as loved ones don’t come home this night again Firefighters police, heroes When asked to help, risk their lives, they didn’t stop didn’t say no One day after another our whole country held our breath hoping, hoping not everyone had ended in death that maybe our loved ones would be survivors when others died we hoped , that while many died our loved ones would survive. And to whom do we owe to what we feel ‘Bush his administrations who didn’t think the threats were real to the al Qaeda who attacked us first The one who built those buildings, unknowing to come this hurt? I think not, we really can only blame ourselves We were not ready for such a thing to in our future delve No one thought to wonder What happens really if terrorists hit that building yonder Are able and ready to cope Or are we not to scared to vote To protect our country keep it safe Although now it’s all to late 3,ooo people died in the attacks No longer do they walk the earth No longer here from birth for them I remember of the attacks that September. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey rhia, I think that it’s great you have written poems about 9/11, I have always wondered why I haven’t seen any of those, but I guess since it’s 2006 nobody is thinking to write them now… Which is sad, because we all need a reminder of what went on that day. Okay, as much as I love “old” English, I would suggest, as if I had any good suggestions, what you don’t use “yonder” in an otherwise modern poem. The word looks kind of out of place by itself, I know that isn’t any big deal but that’s just what I think… Anyway, great poem, and thank you for the reminder of that day, I hope that this year when it comes back around again others might really, really, remember that day, take a moment to think about it. I know that you’ve got me thinking once again of those who died… Thanks for that reminder  @-->--- |
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