Teen Poetry #7 |
no better friend than you |
rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I wish that I could thank you For all that you have ever done Wish I could give what’s due Brought me back, when I tried to run Comforted me, all the times I cried Wet and broken tears There for me, when I hurt bad inside Got rid of all my fears To me you have been Way better than ever have I deserved Truthfully, a true friend Got me to talk, no matter how reserved That I have tried to be When I tried to pull away Opened my eyes to see Past, future, light of each day There are no words that I could ever utter That could ever make up what I might have said It was likely you I hurt the most, in my clutter Not meaning to, you never laughed at tears I shed I probably made you mad But, You stood by me true And never could I ask For a better friend than you |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
WOW!! I love this, the emotion is very relatable! You're lucky to have such a good friend, and to have such amazing talent! Good job! When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
It sounds like you have one awesome friend there! Yet, don't cut yourself short, I'm sure you do the same things for them... I think it's a two way street, you both have excellent friends in each other. Anyway, I liked the poem, but I didn't feel it had the same kind of qualities as some of your other poems, no offence. The flow and things were kind of so-so to me. That could just be me too. Although, what I would suggest is you reading this allowed to yourself a couple times, see if you notice it. If not i'm sure that it is just me. "I wish that I could thank you For all that you have ever done Wish I could give what’s due Brought me back, when I tried to run" This part was my favorite, because I can relate so well to it. I have a friend that is like the friend in this and I've never been able to thank her enough for everything she's done. I never will be able too but I'm sure going to try... Thanks a bunch for sharing! @-->--- |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
aww this is sweet. i love your rhyming. it didn't seem forced at all! keep it up! myspace username-beautiful_tragidy |
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