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Just In Time! |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I grabbed my heart from his hands, now he has no time to crumble it. I'm sorry baby, but I'm not gonna let you crush me and my heart. ( that's been taped back together) I'm not gonna let us part. ( Me and my heart) But do you see, me and you don't belong. I'm sorry baby so long. Now I sit down and cry, all because time past by. You know what, it was just in time. [This message has been edited by cherrys_rule (07-24-2006 09:32 PM).] |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey Cherrys_rule, Nice poem! I loved the ending on this, it was kind of like asking a question and yet coming up with the revelation that, "hey, i made it out before it was too late", i loved that! Umm, you might want to change the word "pasted" to something out, i'm pretty sure that's not the word you wanted to use... Thanks again for sharing though! IT was an awesome write  @-->--- |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Or maybe "pasted" is the word you wanted to use and I just think it's spelled differently? Confusing... Because, isn't "pasted" like pasting something into a book or copy/paste? Maybe not, i'm not that great at spelling... Ignore me! lolz @-->--- |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
yes, pasted is like...i just pasted those pages together, lol i liked this poem though, keep writing! -later Viola |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
Thanks I didn't mean to type that at all. I was talking on the phone and typing. Sorry about that. Thanks for keeping a sharp eye though |
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