Teen Poetry #7 |
it's something i just can't explain. |
electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
i wish i could make you sit still "for me, only for me" please, you know how much i regret not saying those things i need to say caught within my throat for another day dont leave now, i have faith i have faith against my fingertips close enough to touch living within us and the future looks so bright dimmed by the stars in your eyes and when you look my way it's too real, so real i want to hold onto those moments lie within the comfort your arms bring and whisk myself away from this world forget that love like this takes years to grow forget that imperfections always always always show in the worst times, the times where we are so young, so young at heart these moments i know that i would never want to part away from your side, breaking everything in stride i’m breaking i’m breathing without you here please, you know how much i regret not saying those things i need to say caught within my throat for another day dont leave now, i have faith i have faith against my fingertips close enough to touch living within us and the future looks so bright so bright tonight, so bright |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
"please, you know how much i regret not saying those things i need to say caught within my throat for another day dont leave now, i have faith i have faith against my fingertips close enough to touch" Wow.. I loved this soooo much. I can relate, in a way, especially right now.. I'm going through something though it's not exactly like this.. I think I understand where you were coming from. This poem touches me deeply, it is full of emotion. Great job.. Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
"for me, only for me" --- this line sort of confused me. i'm not sure. i guess i didn't see its tie into the rest of the poem. could you explain it? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"forget that imperfections always always always show in the worst times, the times where we are so young, so young at heart these moments i know that i would never want to part away from your side, breaking everything in stride i’m breaking i’m breathing without you here" Wow! This part of the poem was just... Wow! The whole poem was so amazing though, it's hard to choose what, i think, is the best. I liked the part Heather liked a lot also... This is like one of my favorite poems of yours now, you can tell, at least I think you can, that a lot of time went into the making of this. IT was simply awesome! Thanks a bunch for sharing @-->--- |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
i loved this poem! amazing write! and i am not just saying that! -later Viola |
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