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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
my sorry attempt at an ABC poem.lol dedicated to Mora Davison who died in '98 in a tragic accident. when she and i were 5. After you died I didn’t know what to do Before, when you lived, content being friends with you Crying tears, I cried an ocean when I understood Do know, I was little, older before concepts grasp I could Even now 7years later, remembering it makes me flinch in pain For then I didn’t realize how not saying goodbye, now my shame Gone forever, I never said goodbye, I never said I was sorry, and apologized Hope that you might still be around, long ago faded, since then I realized I can hope and dream all I wish, but fairytales never come to life Just when I understood it all, other kids made living just full of strife Knowing that you were gone, and dealing with who once were my friends Living became just pure torture, I missed you so, and my suffering had no ends Mora, my friend I still ask why you had to go Not how, but why I lost my friend, years ago “Oh”, is all that I said when my mother told me about my best friends death Previous to that moment, I was fine, until I got you no longer drew breath Quiet I got, all I kind of understood is you had left Recklessly I began to search for you, a friend theft Secretly I hated god, for putting you and me through all this Trying to make it better, I decided maybe a reason might exist Uncertain of what I believed, I thought that maybe god was bad Various people, told me different, I never listened, and I knew what I had. While now this friend who was almost my sis, had went missing X-raying into my heart, my other friends tried to comfort, without reminiscing Your death made them remember how unkind they may have been Zero answers are around for why life works so we hardly ever win. [This message has been edited by rhia_5779 (07-18-2006 10:48 PM).] |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
wow...i dont think that was a sorry attempt. that was the most emotional and heart felt abc poem i have ever read! i am sorry about your friend! dying is a part of life..a sucky part but none the less a very big part. loosing your best friend it not fun i know it was seven years ago, but if you need somone to talk to i am here, i know exaclty how it feels to loose someone that close! so if you wanna talk sometime im cool with that thanks for sharing your poem! loves and hugs Viola |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
woooah! i've been reading through the poems that ive missed over the past 2 weeks, and *no offense to them* i couldnt comment them cuz i didnt know what to say. well When i read this it amazed me! I could NEVER be able to write a poem with the ABC's. GREAT job! i really enjoyed this! And if your friend really did die then i'm really sorry. i know what thats like. anyway, this was done really well and it was very good. cant wait to read more from you. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
wow, that was defiantly not a sorry attempt..I'm thinking back to '98 and wondering what i was doing...I was only 5 then, also, so I probably wasn't thinking about what other people were going through. Which makes me sad. Everyday now i think how bad i have it, and all i have to do to see other people have it worse is turn on the TV or go to the internet. There's always horrific news stories there. I think this poem is great, seriously. I honestly loved it. I wrote an ABC poem a while back, february i think, and i didn't even post it it was so bad. Your's is really good. I hope, someday soon, you come to an understanding with your feelings and God. I know how you feel, i lost someone very dear to me this year, 6 months ago, but im learning different ways to deal with it. like viola said, if you want to talk, you can email me sometime or something.or, if you want go to the discussion area and go to feelings, Alot of people helped me understand what i was going through, maybe read what they told me? it might help. but, over all, this poem was DEFIANTLY NOT sorry=) hugglets=) -missy |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
thanks, to everyone who replied |
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