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Going Forward |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
All my life I’ve Been told to ‘Go forward’. Class junkies and brown nosers alike Despise this saying that Everyone pretty much ignores. Following my 14th birthday, ‘Go Forward’ has been my Hypothetical mission in life,. But here’s an Interesting question, a Jarring thought Keenly thought out point. Let’s say, theoretically, of course, My future would still be intact if I didn’t follow that Neat little rule, that Old, worn out saying. Perhaps I want to go left or right? Queer Idea, I know, but what if I choose to go in a Radically different direction, choose to be Simply mediocre? Think about it, would it be that bad? Maybe my own Unique happiness lies in not being the best, life’s Valedictorian, if you will. Why do I have to ‘Go forward?’ ‘Xplain’ that to me, Mom and Dad, why are You forcing me to ‘Go forward’ so Zealously if I don’t necessarily want to? |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
wow.. I understand you completely on this.. and I see what you mean.. I like how you explained this.. great job.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey Waterfairy103, Once again I’m awe of your talents, this one has got to be my favorite by you so far! It’s simply amazing to me the way you voiced this your choice of words… simple yet logical yet deep? Or that’s what I think… The only thing I didn’t really like was this part, jarring thought keenly thought out point.”, I am one of those people who don’t really care for repetitiveness and well, I admit that even two of the word “thought” is to much for me… No offence, I mean it wouldn’t be so bad, in my opinion, if they weren’t right next to each other but since they are I feel like we could do without… Anyway, I loved the way you voiced this, the questions, and dare I say slight rebellion in this was a brilliant and pleasurable read to me. I can’t wait to see more of your work in the near future  @-->--- |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I loved it. I can totally relate to you. The thing Stargal pointed out does kinda throw you off but not really. If you or Staral or anyone else have another suggestion to replace that word I would speak up. And WaterFairy103, I am going to respect your wished and give you a "good job!". Good job! Jessica |
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