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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
I see you laughing on the outside But then i creep inside you and see you're lost tou try to cover up all the... pain all the... hurt all the... tears When you know it's almost impossible to do so you shrink yourself down into nothing when really all you want is... help stop screaming in silence stop running in fear let it all out and announce your thoughts befriend you ghoasts and say what you think Don't shy away Don't doubt it at all you gotta stand up real strong and tall Show people what you're made of Let them know... That you won't fall For every drop of my blood that falls |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Amber, this was AMAZING.. I love your poetry.. it is so deep and some people might not understand it.. but I just read into these things lol.. but you do a wonderful job of expressing your feelings.. this is one of my favorite by you already great job.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Amber, ... wow. I really liked this one. It's going in my library. You discribed every thing so well. Your feelings, just verything. Nicceee. Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey spaz02, Let me tell ya, you've got some crazy talent in writing! Your going to make me jealous wishing I could write half as good as what I've seen you write...  This is probably going to be my favorite by you for a long time, I loved the emotions you put in this. The advice, the pain, sadness, and the... shimmer? Like the mirage of who you are on the outside but not of who you are inside, that was awesome! The way you put that life crawling into someone you finaly see what they are like, loved it... "stop screaming in silence stop running in fear let it all out and announce your thoughts befriend you ghoasts and say what you think Don't shy away Don't doubt it at all you gotta stand up real strong and tall Show people what you're made of Let them know... That you won't fall" For me the imagery in this was just amazing, that's the only word i can think of to describe it! I know that's not good enough but that's all i have... Thanks so much for sharing your poetry online, I know that I look forward to reading more when I can  @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i loved this poem it made so much sense to me....... i feel like that right now so i can say i relate to the poem i guess..... keep up the good work ~hunnie~ A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
aww..thank you guys all so much! u r all so warming..and i love it i never thought that any of my stuff was that good but i dunno prolly cuz im the one writing it but..thanks alot! i only write what i feel..and when i feel..somtimes im just numb..and i write bout that too.. For every drop of my blood that falls |
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