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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan 
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My Two Faces The melting pot inside my mind is spicy yet sweet pleasent but mean sarcastic yet sensitive And much like Mr. Hyde and the fair Dr. Jekyll I bounce inbetween these invisibe ropes Just like a cat my claws are always sharpened always ready to retract when my pride is shot down straight from its' sheath, hidden in cloth it's velvet so soft that you'd walked by it before and without any thought you're set in my trap But the great Dr. Jekyll will shine through at times with will holding strong and the smile not fazed so in my attempt to be "the bigger man" I'll turn my back to you and your web of lies shining in the light of God's angelic glow Yet alas my emotions run as high as a kite wired with the electricity that flows through my veins exuding from the bolts of lightning in the sky that strike down with force to make me react with my fists raised to the heavens ready to pounce But these entities are in everyone at least to some extent for saving face to some and sharing your demons with others is what binds us all together in the end of it all together in out common bond of our many masks of emotions Just like the duo of the infamous two /\/The Editing Queen\/\ A good writer possesses not only his own spirit but also the spirit of his friends. [This message has been edited by The Shadow in Blue (06-25-2006 02:23 PM).] |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde.. wow... not many people will even know who your talking about lol.. this was great.. you put so much emotion into your poetry.. great job.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey the shadow in blue! I loved this poem it’s very intense! One of the main reasons I liked this though was because of the use of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. That was simply amazing, and yes, I’m surprised like Heather that people even remember those guys… I guess I shouldn’t be, it’s standard school reading, or it was when I read it, but still… You continue to astonish me with your amazing feats in poetry! Although, I must admit that some of the stuff in this poem was lost to me, I’m a little fuzzy headed right now with a cold. So I’m sure I didn’t understand as much of this poem as I would’ve wished… but I did want to tell you I thought you did an awesome job on this! I hope to be able to see more of your poems in the near future  @-->--- |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
I thought this was good, I havent seen two many Dr. Jekyl and my Mr. Hyde poems that could spark my interest in exclusion to this and another from another site. I am new to this site but i have been writing for almost a year and I think that this poem defintely has its strength in the concept...which is considerably hard with the rugged concept of Dr. Jekyl and Mr. Hyde...anyways good job...elevation is the key Return the favor on: Dreams of a Vet |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
Thanks for the responses and much adieu to you all. I'd have to agree and disagree to Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde lack of prescense in my (high school) generation's world. I mean sure we don't read about it in high school directly, but-at least to me- most people should know the basic gist of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde, even if you aren't a fan of reading. I think that of it in the sense that it depends on what you grew up and learned around for the extent of this classic's notority. (and d@mn did I just write a whole paragraph on what the English Department puts into their programs...  )On to other things, Stargal just to help you with the clearing up of my latest venture on this site I guess I can explain the circumstances in which I wrote it. Basically I was trying to convey the point that everyone has a negative and positive aspect to their personality and self by using said doctor and his alter ego. And I know I probably muddled up some lines in this, but heck nobody is perfect. And that is my lecture for today. My next class is...next tuesday afternoon.  |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Lol! Much appreciated Teacher, but no offence, I think I learned that much from just reading the poem... What I was trying to say was that I "might" have missed something while I was reading that I shouldn't have. Maybe something deeper within the poem that I didn't notice, and since I didn't comment on so said "deeper" piece, I hope it didn't offend you. Okay, that's confusing, what i'm trying to say is if i missed something while reading the poem I apologize for my lack of clear headed thinking err... That still doesn't make sense! All well, cya in class on tuesday @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
But these entities are in everyone at least to some extent for saving face to some and sharing your demons with others is what binds us all together in the end of it all together in out common bond of our many masks of emotions Just like the duo of the infamous two i liked this stanza but i didn't really like the flow of the rest of it..... if you wanted to i think you could make changes and it would be nice.. it was a little long though...... good job on the last stanza *hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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