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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK 
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Please comment ... How could something so perfect, Just simply crash and burn. They all told me you you did this, That this was just my turn. But i refused to believe them, I thought I really meant something. Being naive like I am, I imagined we could make something. I believed that we where special, But all you told me where lies. Every time you said you loved me, As you looked deeply into my eyes. At the time I was vunerable, You took advantage of my pain. You knew how weak I was, But you captured me all the same. When you held me in your arms, When you gave me your kiss. When you showed me your smile, These are the times I miss. All that is left are memories, But I see you every day. I hate having to be your friend, I never know what to say. Why where you so scared? Afraid I would hurt you, I gave you my everything, What more could I do? Willing to make sacrfices, Happy to play your way. Not afraid to compromise. Listening to what you say. This wasn't supposed to happen, I wasn't supposed to fall for you. But love is so blind, Now I don't know what to do. Don't hate the player, Just hate the game. Easier said than done, But that's what they all say. I don't hate you at all, I actually really like you. So I am completley confused, As to what I should do. Belinda x |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
Hiya please comment ! thanks ! xD Belinda x |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I loved this poem.. sounds very like something that I would write.. great job.. i can relate to this in more than one way.. good write.. ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
Thanks ! I'll take that as a compliment ! tehe! yes, I think a few girls .. and boys muct go through this..it's hard but (hopefully) it will all turn out wel lol. thanks for the comment .. keep them comin ! xD Belinda x |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
good poem but i strongly suggest against asking people to comment your poems...big turn off for people sorry. dont mean to sound mean..haha i used the same word 2 times sweet..okay sorry anyways it was an okay poem though |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"This wasn't supposed to happen, I wasn't supposed to fall for you. But love is so blind, Now I don't know what to do." I loved this stanza, i often times wonder why i fall so hard for certain people when i never was supposed too. At least i didn't think i was supposed too... It just goes to show you can't help loving someone, it's just something that happens? I enjoyed this poem by you a lot, it was something i could understand... Although, not meaning to be harsh, but i also feel like you didn't need to put in the, "please comment", it was a little bit of a turn off for me... I know i shouldn't let that matter but sometimes it bugs me because i usually do post on everyones in teen... So, really there's no need for you to ask us too, i'm sure you'll get at LEAST 2 comments, and look, you have 3 now  Great poem though, i'd love to see more of yours in the near future! @-->--- |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
alright ! thanks .. sorry .. lol. i suppose you just can't choose who you fall for aye ! belinda x |
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