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Foreverone8783
Junior Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 24
Illinios

0 posted 2006-06-20 09:30 PM

To scared to leave
Not wanting to stay
She won't leave them
She does what they say

To scared to tell them
What she really dreams
But they don't realize
Everything's not as it seems

They think she's happy
But it's all pretend
What's behind her smile
They wouldn't comprehend

They keep her here
They can't let her go
Afraid to hurt them
So they'll never know

She follows their wishes
Instead of her own
She stays close to them
She stays close to home

But if one day she leaves
What would they do
Would they be mad at her
Would they hate her too

*^*Ashley*^*

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

1 posted 2006-06-20 10:34 PM

that was interesting. good ending
yeah nice write

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-06-21 12:18 PM

I like this.. I can relate to it in my own way. Great job.. keep up the good writes.

~Heather`

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-06-21 01:23 AM

"To scared to tell them
What she really dreams
But they don't realize
Everything's not as it seems"

I can relate to this stanza in so many ways, because I feel like this at times... I know that I say I can "relate" to something a lot, but it's true, some things that people write seem like me...

For myself, I couldn't help but feel sad for the girl, maybe it's you, maybe it's not. Yet, I know there are girls out there that feel like this, like they have to live up to what other people believe they should be... That's sad because at times I am that girl, and even though I try hard not to be, sometimes you just can't help caring about what others think you should be...

I think you did an excellent job with this poem. You were able to convey the emotions in this to the reader, you were able to make them hurt for the "girl". It was brilliant...

I can't wait to see more of your poems in the near future

@-->---

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2006-06-21 01:25 AM

that was really good. i cant personally relate that much, but i can see where many other maybe able to.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

5 posted 2006-06-28 04:23 AM

Sometimes, you need to follow your heart, not your conscience. The people that really love you would want you to be happy

^*^Angel^*^

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