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Blood to bleed |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
"I don't love you anymore," is all I remember you telling me. Never have I felt so cold, but I have no more blood to bleed cause my heart has been draining into the sea. Steps I take in your footsteps aren't getting me closer to you.To what is left of dreams of what I once claimed to know. Within my bones this resonate, boiling blood will circulate. Could you tell me again, what you did this for? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I like it, except for one thing in it... First you say you can bleed no more cause your heart poured your blood out into the sea but than you say that within your bones your blood will circulate, am i missing something or did those two statements contradict themselves? I'm so confused... Could you explain this to me? Other than that i liked the poem. It was different but very good. Thanks for sharing once again  @-->--- |
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