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hidden tears |
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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is 
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he sits behind the walls, hoping he can hide his flaws, but everyone see's his fears, all the way through to his hidden tears. he tries so hard to see the good in his life, but drowns in the sea of his hard, desperate needs. ~L (short...yes.) |
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Foreverone8783 Junior Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 24Illinios |
Short but still good. I can't pinpoint what I like about the poem, I just know I do, if that makes any sense? |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
make it longer. kinda leaves you hanging. i like it so far. but add to it! |
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