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Foreverone8783
Junior Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 24
Illinios

0 posted 2006-05-30 11:23 AM

Why am I so weak
When I want to be strong
Why can't I get it right
Instead of feeling so wrong

What's wrong with me
Why am I so scared
Why can't I let anyone closer
Why is there nobody there

I push everyone away
But I don't want to let go
I keep running farther
From what I don't know

I have no where to go
Why can't I just stay
Why can't I change
Isn't there any way

I want to be different
Why can't I just be
Why am I hiding
Why can't I be me

I'm fighting myself
Running from what's real
I don't want to be hurt
So I am afraid to feel

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2006-05-30 04:53 PM

thats really beautifuly written..i know exactly how you feel, when someone gets close to you, you puch them away without knowing why? I know exactly what you mean...that poem expresses the way i feel and i didn't even write it, it shows what a great writer you are..great job

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away

i have decided to love, hate is too much to bear
-MLK, jr.

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

2 posted 2006-05-31 11:58 PM

This is wonderful! It's very feeling, and shows a little bit of what I think EVERY teenager is going through. The flow was a teensy bit iffy in some places, but it didn't detract at ALL from the poem!! Excellently written, if I do say so myself.

~WF

Dance like nobody's watching,
Love like you've never been hurt.
Sing like nobody's listening,
and Live like it's Heaven on Earth.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-06-01 01:22 AM

Hey foreverone8783,

This poem is so much like how I feel at times. I can relate to your poem in many ways yet, not only teenagers will relate but also some adults.

Like everyone else said this poem is beautiful, wonderful, amazingly well written and simply amazing. There is nothing to critique that hasn’t been said so far. You’ve captured the feelings of people that little bit of insecurity, that feeling of confusion, everything. You’ve said it all.

Great write on this one. By far one of my favorites by you.
This is one for my library I believe.

Hope to see more from you

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