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forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

0 posted 2006-05-29 09:09 PM

Im trapped in a hole so far down I can’t see up to the opening,
Or it’s right there and im too blind from focusing on me to see.

I’m sorry for being so far from the light,
I didn’t know what was right,
I didn’t know I was this wrong,
I just kept digging past the bottom.

I’m trapped in a box that I don’t know is tightly surrounding me,
Or there’s no box and my thoughts blocked it all away from me.

I’m sorry for running away,
I didn’t know how to play,
I didn’t know I was breaking the rules,
I just kept getting past the laws.

I’m trapped behind a wall not knowing what im trapped from, I couldn’t see,
But I know I must get past this wall to get my life returned to me.

I’m sorry for not being me,
I didn’t even see,
Who you wanted me to become,
Where you wanted me to go,
I know I should have known.

I’m climbing out of this hole,
I’m leaving this box, letting it go,
Im knocking down this wall,
And I’m going to live this all,
Live this all for what you knew I would be,
What you knew I could be – me.

[This message has been edited by forever*wishing (05-29-2006 09:45 PM).]

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-05-29 09:54 PM

Hey forever*wishing,

This is a very interesting post.
It is not what I usually expect when reading the first post by an author.
I liked it though, it was unique, and in many ways I can relate to this poem, to the feeling of being trapped.
The name is just perfect for this!

Anyway, welcome to piptalk. It is nice to see a new face around here, and I hope you will like pip

Great first post, I can’t wait to see more from you

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forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

2 posted 2006-05-29 09:58 PM

thank you...
my friend told me about this, and i thought i'd try it out.

~L

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

3 posted 2006-05-29 10:09 PM

Great job.. I loved this.. i like how at the end you restated your ideas sort of.. great writing.. I hope to hear more from you.. keep it up..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

scyzoryk_o4
Junior Member

since 2006-05-23

Posts 36
Canada and Poland

4 posted 2006-05-29 10:42 PM

Hey, I think your friend gave you the wrong web site this should be posted here: http://100-poems.com/poems/teen/
Honestly this is an excellent poem.
I’m also new so it may be rude for me to greeting you....but welcome and keep posting your masterful literature.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

5 posted 2006-05-30 04:31 PM

great write, this poem is defiantly good. I'm glad your friend told you about this site, so i could read your poetry!!beautiful.

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