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what makes me like you
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what makes me like you |
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Sweetie01 Junior Member
since 2006-05-15
Posts 28NJ, USA |
your smile is made of sunshine your hair is made of rain your kiss is full of candy your arms are filled with me your touch sends me chills that go up and down my spine your voice is something that makes me wanna die it is so soft and gentle but yet so hopeful and strong being with you makes me so happy i just wanna jump with joy and glee what do i wanna do? who do i wanna see? all i want is to be with you forever, now do you see? * This is not one of my poems that I really like, but I guess its ok. I would really like some opinions on it, please, if you can? Thank-You, <3 Amanda |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
Very good metaphor "Your kiss is full with candy that goes up and down my spine" I reallly like that. Good write. Keep them up. |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
i really like it. i think it was great. these are my fav. lines "your voice is something that makes me wanna die it is so soft and gentle but yet so hopeful and strong" love it!! *leah ps. this is going in my library |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
Welcome to P.I.P. Sweetie01!I liked the word choice you used, epecially, "your touch sends me chills that go up and down my spine" I think this poem describes a little bit of how I feel for my best friend. ^_- Jill |
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Sweetie01 Junior Member
since 2006-05-15
Posts 28NJ, USA |
Thanks for the great replys, I'm glad you liked it <33 Amanda |
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