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used and bruised, and sick of it, saying my piece
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used and bruised, and sick of it, saying my piece |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
You used me, and you knew what you were doing, You tormented me, only caring what boys you were wooing Laughing, if I made a mistake, you always took part Teasing me, never caring about my ripped broken heart I thought you were my friend, I gave you another chance, Again. Each time you took what I said and twisted it, warped Till I could hardly belief where you were going toward You hurt me, stabbed me deep My friendship you didn’t want to keep But you kept me believing, I couldn’t tell That what I thought wasn’t what I was seeing. I thought that I could trust you, but maybe I was wrong I think from the beginning, our friendship wasn’t strong You came to me, for reasons I don’t know I went to you; I idolized you, now I’ll go 5 long years, you twisted and tore me Turning me away from where I should be My friends you didn’t like, why you care Who knew, but if I wouldn’t drop them then and there You made me get Hell Didn’t let me forget Now finally I have realized, you aren’t the boss You mistreated me, hurt me bad, totally your Loss. I have friends better then seems that you ever had Since every time you dropped me, you came back. Your friends, older Didn’t always let you So you came to me for a shoulder What you found instead, was somebody you could tease Who for a long time didn’t say anything, wanted to appease I thought you were great, so cool so nice Was I wrong, made the mistake of my life? |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
i liked this poem, alot actually! you have a very good way of getting your point across! keep writing! Viola |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
my ryme schemes might be kinda weird . i kinda just set them up however i want. i dont know i just like doing difffernt ryme schemes for diff poems, its more interesting |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey Rhia, Sad poem, that kind of "friends" can scar you for life... I liked this poem though, I like how you talked about how “you” were being abuse by this “friend” and you finally figured out that the “friend” had no control over you, that you didn’t need them. “Now finally I have realized, you aren’t the boss You mistreated me, hurt me bad, totally your Loss. I have friends better then seems that you ever had Since every time you dropped me, you came back.” my favorite part^^. It shows that you no longer care that you are free. I like that. It’s a very well written stanza and I can relate to it. Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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broken_smile1469 Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104 |
i loved this poem. i can really relate to it! great job |
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broken_smile1469 Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104 |
i loved this poem. i can really relate to it! great job |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
awhile ago i just kinda told her to stop. she fought me over it, acted that i had to earn it before she would treat me decently. i ended the friendship |
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