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Sweetpali08 Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40 |
Not my story but my poem. Lots of mistakes I know. I had no time to fix. Sorry. Thanks ----------------------------------------------------- There would be a day You'll look at me again, and say I want you back. But that day would be too late because i would have found someone who loves me and cares for what i do in life. And this other day would be today You will cry and cry and i would not come closer to you and tell you : Everything will be alright: You ripped that heart in me. and my blue brown eyes , you made them turn into the hell of life. But Life will make you regret. Regret the torture you put in me. There would be another day than today: and you will see everything that reminds you of me. And you will cry like i cried and rip your hair out ,for what you have done to that innocent smile in me. I would never regret what i had, Because love is something that is needed in every human heart. This other day was yesturday Where that knife got stabbed in between your veins but you did not bleed. Simply because you were never a real human being. You act as if it hurts you when you see or hear me cry But reality will show you why. I would never hope for death , I would never hope for sadness that may fill your house. But i will hope all my life,that you would see what you put in me. and get all that torture in return. When i needed that smile You gave it to me Then today was the day you ripped it off my face. When i needed someone to care All i found was you But you took advantage of my tears and threw them in the sea, simply because you don't want the world to see. That you found someone other than me. Its fine, it don't hurt me anymore , i got use to seeing my tears fall on the ground ,where no one sees. There would be a day other than today and you will say: What have i done?????? But that day would be today because i would be in back of that road with someone that could actually see, that my love for you , would be out of my lead. And soo this is today where i can tell you: I hope you burn in hell the same way , i was punished from your ignorance and fears. And so this is love, There is always a good bye to everything we feel and see,simply because its all a test from God. BY:NMusa "How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!" ~Paradise now |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
That was ok i guess i thuoght i was going to expect more. But that's ok. Good write. ~Courtney~ |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
this was a good write... structure could use a little work as well as the rhythm. however, i liked the imagery and the content it was a very good piece in that. The portrayal of the pain felt was clear as day... look forward to seeing some more Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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