Glitter Doesn't Shine As Much Anymore

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Teen Poetry #7

Glitter Doesn't Shine As Much Anymore

sometimesitslonely
Junior Member

since 2005-12-27

Posts 41
USA

0 posted 2006-05-03 08:27 PM

If you're as beautiful
a
s

the lies you tell,

Then my dear

you're

g
o
r
g
e
o
u
s
.

Tell me thats a sin

but that's all you ever

w
e
r
e
.

This smile is fake,
These tears aren't.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-05-03 10:09 PM

"wow" there's not too much i can say about this.. it was so short.. "that's all you ever were" beautifully written.. I love this piece from you it's different the the others of yours that I have read.. this is so short but i understand it and it is wonderfully done.. no mistakes really that I can see..

I think I'm the first to post.. I do believe that you will receive many responses on this.. great job..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-05-04 01:23 AM

Omgosh... This is such a good poem, it's amazingly awesome! lol...

I'm not quite sure what i think about the
d
o
w
n
w
a
r
d
s - letters, it could be a little confusing on the longer words, like gorgeous was... but it does add a sort of uniquness about the whole thing.

Good job on this poem though, i loved the part where you said,

"if you're as beautiful as the lies you tell, than my dear, you're gorgeous"

very coo... at least i think that is how it went...