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pullingxthextrigger
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0 posted 2006-05-01 10:54 PM


Drinking and Driving

You know that voice inside your head?
You hear it everywhere- school, work, and bed?

You might think your going crazy
You might think that your minds going hazy

Tell me what that voice says
You used to be great; now your life’s a mess

It all started with that voice in your head
You couldn’t stop drinking because of what the voice said

You didn’t stop there
You started drinking and driving here

You killed a family or two
There’s a life sentence for you

You were in jail
Waiting for that money so you can bail

You waited for me for 20 years
Let me tell you that im not coming to shed tears

You think you can come into my life
Walk right out with huge strife’s

You think you can make me cry endlessly
For you to just come back to me

I don’t think I can help you much
You have to learn your lesson without a crutch

Now 30 years after that horrible day
I tell my children the story my way

When I hear that you finally died
don’t you think I haven’t cried

Im the only one at your funeral; its true
But at least you know that I wasn’t all cruel

There’s a lesson to be learned that you may have seen
Don’t drink and drive while you’re a teen

<3 ~nora


your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3  llx - Panic!At The Disco!

© Copyright 2006 Nora - All Rights Reserved
Kaos
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1 posted 2006-05-02 01:16 PM


i can relate to this well... i got a DUI bfore christmas and even though i wasn't drunk and just barely over the limit, had i had my friend with me like he usually is, his legs would've been crushed in the accident... and had i not looked up with the brief second to move 3 inches left... i wouldn't be leaving this reply, nor much of anything after that. It's a very scary thing that wreaks havoc on our society and unfortunately nobody learns until it's too late. Excellent post with a strong message...

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by:  Me.  (posted in Dark Poetry)

sins_and_tragedies
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2 posted 2006-05-02 03:20 PM


wicked poem in no way can i relate but in a way as if somone died like you knew you would thinknonly the impossible...what ifs...

danielle
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is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality

pullingxthextrigger
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3 posted 2006-05-02 03:29 PM


thank u both for replying
love hearing from you guys
glad your not dead kaos


~nora <3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3  llx - Panic!At The Disco! **Time To Dance**

stargal
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4 posted 2006-05-02 06:53 PM


I think that I can relate to this in more ways than most people...

I don't really like reading poems like this, no offence, because of some bad memories, but this one i couldn't pass up...

Pretty much all i can say is good write, because it is, and it's sad, and... lots of things, just keep writing positive things like this

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5 posted 2006-05-02 07:10 PM


I have never gotten a DUI. It's kinda hard for me to get one. lol. I don't think that you should drink and drive even if you're not a teen. The poem it self could use some more organization. The last word of almost every line, of every stanza rhymed. It might be better if every last word of each line for each stanza rhymed always. Nice spelling and I liked the way you worded the poem. Nice write.

                Jessica

pullingxthextrigger
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6 posted 2006-05-02 10:17 PM


thx for replying stargal and jessica
sry for the bad mems stargal
but i know sum ppl who died;teens
thx for the advice jessica


~nora <3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3  llx - P!ATD!

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