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Drinking And Driving |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
Drinking and Driving You know that voice inside your head? You hear it everywhere- school, work, and bed? You might think your going crazy You might think that your minds going hazy Tell me what that voice says You used to be great; now your life’s a mess It all started with that voice in your head You couldn’t stop drinking because of what the voice said You didn’t stop there You started drinking and driving here You killed a family or two There’s a life sentence for you You were in jail Waiting for that money so you can bail You waited for me for 20 years Let me tell you that im not coming to shed tears You think you can come into my life Walk right out with huge strife’s You think you can make me cry endlessly For you to just come back to me I don’t think I can help you much You have to learn your lesson without a crutch Now 30 years after that horrible day I tell my children the story my way When I hear that you finally died don’t you think I haven’t cried Im the only one at your funeral; its true But at least you know that I wasn’t all cruel There’s a lesson to be learned that you may have seen Don’t drink and drive while you’re a teen <3 ~nora your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - Panic!At The Disco! |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
i can relate to this well... i got a DUI bfore christmas and even though i wasn't drunk and just barely over the limit, had i had my friend with me like he usually is, his legs would've been crushed in the accident... and had i not looked up with the brief second to move 3 inches left... i wouldn't be leaving this reply, nor much of anything after that. It's a very scary thing that wreaks havoc on our society and unfortunately nobody learns until it's too late. Excellent post with a strong message... Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
wicked poem in no way can i relate but in a way as if somone died like you knew you would thinknonly the impossible...what ifs... danielle xx is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
thank u both for replying love hearing from you guys glad your not dead kaos ~nora <3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - Panic!At The Disco! **Time To Dance** |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I think that I can relate to this in more ways than most people... I don't really like reading poems like this, no offence, because of some bad memories, but this one i couldn't pass up... Pretty much all i can say is good write, because it is, and it's sad, and... lots of things, just keep writing positive things like this  @-->--- |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I have never gotten a DUI. It's kinda hard for me to get one. lol. I don't think that you should drink and drive even if you're not a teen. The poem it self could use some more organization. The last word of almost every line, of every stanza rhymed. It might be better if every last word of each line for each stanza rhymed always. Nice spelling and I liked the way you worded the poem. Nice write. Jessica |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
thx for replying stargal and jessica sry for the bad mems stargal but i know sum ppl who died;teens thx for the advice jessica ~nora <3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD! |
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