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Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2006-04-29 03:22 PM

@#$* !
  I think too much
maybe a pioneer into the beginning of a whirlwind
  carried to a new state
    a crisper view     on my misdeeds
on the weak excuse of my existence
    i called my life
Thriving on the dependancy of others
    pathetic!
Always a wary glance to where i was a moment ago
             Was i seen?
Did anyone see me?
                When i was vulnerable
I hope nobody saw me        hopeless
    in need of belonging
                weak!
This!    this is why i forsaked this life
  the wondering of everyones real intentions
         the eating at my soul
Repentance!    screams to me
    Any answer     to my so called existence
               would be nice
Abandoned    staring into an empty void
  my own path    ahunting   looming in the night
Stuck   like the souls left to wander aimless in limbo
   for eternity              @#$*

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by: Me. (posted in Dark Poetry)

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-04-30 10:09 PM

This is my all time favorite post by you.. I hope to hear more..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-04-30 10:19 PM

Umm, I think it's very interesting?

The only thing i would suggest would be a little better organization, it's kind of hard to read how it is...

I know that i liked this poem a lot, but i can't really say why i liked it, maybe cause i feel like this is me, in a sense... does that make sense? nah, all well...

Great poem though, i'd love to see more

@-->---

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

3 posted 2006-05-01 02:13 AM

thanks, the comments mean alot. i've been on the down side of the writing thing... i've only had maybe 2 or 3 new posts so i'm glad to see some responses

thanks bunches
Mike

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by: Me. (posted in Dark Poetry)

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

4 posted 2006-05-11 10:30 PM

woah! how could I have missed a great poem like this??? if there was another word for awesome then it would be this poem!! it rox
keep it up

~nora<3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD!

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