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Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-04-29 12:15 PM



I'm screaming with anger at myself
But I only have myself to blame
Looking in the mirror
I don't like what I've become
But I cant change who I am
My hand meets the glass as it all starts to shatter
The glass falling like tears
And for every shard that reaches the ground
Is just another time I've let myself down
I'm raging with all of these voices
Yelling at me for all of my bad choises
And I don't like the reflection in the mirror
Staring back at me
There are scars inside that run too deep
And there are so many that I don't deserve
But yet they still burn
And in that reflection staring back at me
I see so many memories
That I wish I din't have
But there still there; and they won't just disapear
It always make me wonder
Are we all just living
Or all we all living a lie


© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
ska babe
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since 2005-11-08
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1 posted 2006-04-29 12:48 PM


That was deep but good hope you like it here

"I am the one who has to die when it's my time to die, so I'm gonna live life the way I wanna"- Jimi Hendrix

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
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2 posted 2006-04-29 10:23 AM


Hey.. this was a great first post.. I loved your choice of words.. some of it sounds a little like some of the similies and metaphors I would use.. Great job.. I hope to hear more..

~Heather
"WELCOME TO PIP"

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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3 posted 2006-04-29 07:24 PM


Hey,

I really enjoyed this! I like how you did the thing with mirrors, thing? Like how you used the mirror more than once in this... i'm not making any sense

The only thing is that the ending lines confused me a little bit, could you tell me what you mean?

Also, welcome to pip!

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Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!
4 posted 2006-04-30 01:04 PM


the last two lines really represent that we all have two sides to our selves hence the useage of mirrors.and that we all have a diffrent world under the skin, that we all have a hidden lie of a life that no one knows about.
stargal
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5 posted 2006-04-30 10:48 PM


Thanks for telling me, now it all makes sense

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pullingxthextrigger
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since 2006-05-01
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MA,..USA llx
6 posted 2006-05-01 08:11 PM


i loved this
awesome poem
keep up the great work <3


~nora

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3  llx

AtLsHawTy17
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since 2004-09-07
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7 posted 2006-05-01 09:46 PM


i really like it, that was a really good read, i feel exactly where you are comming from, and the way you put how the broken glass of the mirror is just the mistake you made really sound cool.... i like

Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me

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