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Living Lie |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! 
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I'm screaming with anger at myself But I only have myself to blame Looking in the mirror I don't like what I've become But I cant change who I am My hand meets the glass as it all starts to shatter The glass falling like tears And for every shard that reaches the ground Is just another time I've let myself down I'm raging with all of these voices Yelling at me for all of my bad choises And I don't like the reflection in the mirror Staring back at me There are scars inside that run too deep And there are so many that I don't deserve But yet they still burn And in that reflection staring back at me I see so many memories That I wish I din't have But there still there; and they won't just disapear It always make me wonder Are we all just living Or all we all living a lie |
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ska babe Member
since 2005-11-08
Posts 58nowwhere, IN |
That was deep but good hope you like it here "I am the one who has to die when it's my time to die, so I'm gonna live life the way I wanna"- Jimi Hendrix |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey.. this was a great first post.. I loved your choice of words.. some of it sounds a little like some of the similies and metaphors I would use.. Great job.. I hope to hear more.. ~Heather "WELCOME TO PIP" Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, I really enjoyed this! I like how you did the thing with mirrors, thing? Like how you used the mirror more than once in this... i'm not making any sense  The only thing is that the ending lines confused me a little bit, could you tell me what you mean? Also, welcome to pip!  @-->--- |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
the last two lines really represent that we all have two sides to our selves hence the useage of mirrors.and that we all have a diffrent world under the skin, that we all have a hidden lie of a life that no one knows about. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Thanks for telling me, now it all makes sense @-->--- |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
i loved this awesome poem keep up the great work <3 ~nora your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
i really like it, that was a really good read, i feel exactly where you are comming from, and the way you put how the broken glass of the mirror is just the mistake you made really sound cool.... i like Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me |
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