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Just a dream.....
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Just a dream..... |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
this was a really really in the moment, the words kind just came, i wasnt thinking about poetry, and verses started forming in my head, so i typed up what it was. i dont completely understand it. Maybe that it might be a dream, but who really knows how far that can go? (is it better for short , though) Running flying through the sky Look around, others walking, why Stay on the ground when they don’t have to Why not just soar, discover wings anew How is that no one looks up and sees The creature flying above, me They just go about their daily lives But don’t they want to soar majestic skies. Heads looking down, pretending I don’t exist I call out crying names, my family, I’m not missed I bet they could all do this, why such a mystery I mean I can, already done it, disproved history I fly among people; they walk through my pale form Clouds drift down, on their heads; I play with mini lighting storms I run out into the street, I scream words, to see if they can hear Silly words, weird ones, obscene even, no one yells, how queer Tired, eyelids begin to close, I blink, A mist settling around, I can’t think I collapse on a cloud, drift into the regal skies. I wake up from my stupor, in my room, no longer can I fly. All a dream Not what it seems I was under an illusion, a spell Dreaming of life, a different happening. What could have been Changes start from within. Just a dream… Different routine, Can change, Who knows what Next time It will BE! |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
anyone who sees this, my poem freedom is actually not too long, if they would look at it too? if its annoying ill stop asking you guys hope you like this |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"All a dream Not what it seems I was under an illusion, a spell Dreaming of life, a different happening. What could have been Changes start from within. Just a dream… Different routine, Can change, Who knows what Next time It will BE!" My favorite part^^ I'm not sure what to say, I mean for me it was interesting to read. Yet a lot of it, or so I felt, was just a bunch of jumbled up words. Some of those words formed sentences that made sense for a line or two but than... Well, it was kind of confusing, no offence. It could be because I'm tired though? I don't know... I know that I liked this though, I kind of liked some of the jumbled-up-ness, not all of it, cause I do, at times, expect things to make sense... Yet some of that added to the poem. Made it unique. Great job on this one! Maybe i'll go look at your freedom poem after I take a nap... Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
i dont know where it came from, it was really out of the blue. i just typed the verses, as i thought of them. it is confusing, prob cause i wasnt thinking about each verse, and i didnt change \edit it before i posted it here. |
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