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Teen Poetry #7

Im willing to lose you

drowningmonky
Junior Member

since 2006-03-02

Posts 14
miami, florida

0 posted 2006-04-16 12:28 PM

If you only knew the truth
What I have kept hidden from you
you hate me now
but yet you dont know
how much ive done for you.

Ive given up on you
that is true
but the real reason is still a blur to you
yet you think its because i dont love you
if you only knew
would that take away all the hate you feel for me right now.
would that take away all the pain that ive caused
but it cant compare to the one ive felt and will feel for the rest of my life
Ive taken away years of my life right now
its no longer mine.

Im only 15 but ive grown with this news
and all I think about now is how im going to make it through
and how much I will need you
but I cant change my mind
I cant turn away
Im sorry if I must deprive you and push you away
But you have dreams that im not willing to let you lose
All i want you to know is that i will always love you.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-04-16 10:19 PM

Nice write Lisa. The only thing I have to offer is that you should check your capitalization and put in some apostrophes. Your spelling and organization is good. Good job.

Jessica

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