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acid_tears_i_cry Junior Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 24United States, UT |
I want to be the one to enjoy you. I still love u. I tryied to tell u how I felt, and it just wasnt the same. I know U'll never love me again. I miss u baby.' Dedicated to: Devin Erb By: Malinda Peterson Sry so short guys, I just had to make it simple (im in class) but yea wut do u think? Can you read the word "loneliness" and not think of a dark room? |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
It is very short. I can't really say anything about it. Maybe if it was longer. Did you post this during class or just write it? If you wrote it the you can add more n can't you? Oops! Sorry! That didn't make any sence.  Jessica [This message has been edited by latteaddict213 (04-15-2006 03:31 PM).] |
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dramaticaddict Junior Member
since 2006-04-13
Posts 10ny, usa |
i strongly believe that quantity has nothing to do with quality. very talented writer. my fav line was definitely: "i want to be the one to enjoy you. " sounds very true and honest. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
This poem has a lot of emotions in it, hope, love, and giving up, dare i say that? I loved it, even though it was short, you can say a lot of things in just a few lines. My favorite, favorite line has to be, "I know U'll never love me again. I miss u baby.'" This poem has one or two spelling errors that you might want to correct... Great poem though, i loved the whole thing! @-->--- |
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