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I Could Have Told You... |
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UnsilencedWords666 Member
since 2003-11-19
Posts 63Broken Memories & Falling Tears |
I could have told you I was smoking, I could have told you about having a drink. But I knew what you would say, And I knew what you were going to think. I was always the innocent one, The one who knew better then the rest. The one who never would try to pass, Their dare-devilish test. But I decided against my second thoughts, That no one would ever become aware. That I had made such a stupid decision, And at that single moment, I just didn’t care. So I grabbed a drink when no one was looking, Gulped it down quickly and full of shame. Now I no longer was Innocent Ness, I suddenly had become stripped of my good name. Instantly I knew that I had made a mistake, By taking that bottle from the car. But for a quick ten minutes, I was made a shinning star. Everyone was looking at me, To see my initial reaction. It was like being at the zoo, And I was the main attraction. I sat there feeling horrible, The pit of my stomach feeling sick. I sat there for a moment and realized it wasn’t because ofthe drink, It was because I knew I lowered my self a had just become another chic. In just a single moment, I got caught up in the game. I became just another mindless face, Just another somebody without a name. |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Welcome to Passions! This poem was sad, but it was well written. You tell stories very nicely. Check your email for a special message. Once again, welcome!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
welcome! and this was very well done. It actually reminded me a lot of a friend of mine, who was clean from drugs for months, then started again but was too ashamed to even admit to it. you definately captured a lot of emotion. Great job!!  |
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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
Wow! Welcome to Passions! I can really relate to this poem. It is an awful lot like my own life. Anway, it was a good poem and I hope you keep writing. I look forward to reading more. -Jeanette- |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Welcome, I really liked this because right now my best friend is really innocent and thinks I am too, but I have had a few drinks before, but I don't want her to think of me that way. Nice work ~*~Karen~*~ |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
yes well, thats what we are. we are not beautiful and uniques snowflakes...we are the all singing all dancing crap of the world. |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
I very much enjoyed the later parts of the write keep it up and welcome to PiP. Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless. |
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duncan idaho Member
since 2003-11-14
Posts 70dune |
dertah, you're a fight club cultist huh? awesome!!!!!!!!! me too. we are all part of the same compost heap |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I liked this. I think we've all been there once before. Good write and welcome to Passions. I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX |
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UnsilencedWords666 Member
since 2003-11-19
Posts 63Broken Memories & Falling Tears |
Thank you all very much, I am glad that I have gotten such positive feedback, this is something I wrote to my parents one day after I was missing for a weekend and they wanted to know what happened, I was too ashamed to tell them so I wrote this and gave it to them...Needless to say I've been grounded since the summer and I'm grounded until January 1, 2004-but that's okay 'cuz tough love'sthe best  ) thank you all again*~*Nessa Bear*~* |
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