Teen Poetry #7 |
The Hood and Shield |
the_hoodANDsheild Junior Member
since 2006-03-08
Posts 25Canada |
Beneath this hood I wear a shield. To ensure that I would not be revealed. Hidden secrets and concealed lies, I cannot say when I see your eyes. I know all the truths in the entire world, For all to long in my mind they have swirled. Poison deceit attacks like a praying mantis, I do not want to sink like the fabled Atlantis. To stay a float in the stormy seas, I decided to give you the rarest of all my keys. And now you have the power to do what is good, And release me from my shield and hood. |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
nice write...curiouse i'm looking for you...always... [This message has been edited by curiouse (04-06-2006 02:26 PM).] |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
You’re a really good writer. Love your poem *leah We seek peace, knowing that peace is the climate of freedom. |
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the_hoodANDsheild Junior Member
since 2006-03-08
Posts 25Canada |
Thankyou very much for your comments. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
It's a very nice write. I think in the last line you should change it to hood and sheild instead of sheild and hood. Just a suggestion. Jessica |
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