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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
As the droplets of rain flow down my window As do the tears streaming down my face As the sun colors my golden brown locks As does the smile on my face grow As the snow fills the land As do you fill my heart with such happiness As the roses grow in my grass As does life surprise me with joy As the wind blow me away As do you sweep me off my feet As I grow closer to you As do you grower closer to me... |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
hello guys. would appreciate some feed back, smiles curiouse Curioustity is a fine gift... |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
Sorry It’s so cool how you go from sad to happy. My favorite part is “As the wind blow me away As do you sweep me off my feet “ Its great!! *leah |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
thankyou leah so much for your input i appreciated it, smiles, curiouse Curioustity is a fine gift... |
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sometimesitslonely Junior Member
since 2005-12-27
Posts 41USA |
Wow. I never thought I'd read something that for a second was on the verge of crying and to a smile on my face all in once. Beautiful that you switched it up. Nice.  This smile is fake, |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
thankyou for your response. what can i say, i'm different. smiles, curiouse i'm looking for you...always... |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I also like that you went from good to bad and back again. the second line of each section changed from do to does but on the last section it was do when it should have been does. Maybe i am the only person in the world who would notice a thing like that, but thats who I am and I notice things like that. Jessica |
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