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a world of shadows #1

a deer in lifes headlites
Junior Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 23

0 posted 2003-11-18 05:19 PM

I live in a world of shadows,
a world of eternal darkness.
A world where times only meaning,
is the count down of seconds left in life.
A world where death is enevitable, and life is expendable.
Where hate is eternal, and love is not known.
I live in a world of shadows.

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

1 posted 2003-11-20 08:48 AM

Wow! So short, yet very powerful. Good job. Keep writing. Hope to read more.

~Jeanette~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2003-11-20 01:54 PM

i liked it. it was short yet to the point. great job. the only thing i can think of to say that i didnt like was the length.-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-11-20 03:23 PM

I think it would have been interesting if it was longer, but that would be hard to do without messing it up, it gets to the point the way it is now, Nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to pursue them~Walt Disney

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

4 posted 2003-11-21 01:22 PM

it feels good to get away from that....ahhhhh (hatred breathes a sigh of relief)

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2003-11-21 08:03 PM

I liked this. Good job.

I soak up all the pain, and accept it in silence~DMX

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