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duncan idaho
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since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

0 posted 2003-11-18 02:16 PM

the poem thats really not a poem

I loooooooooooove you,
or do I?
you can't expect my
teenage sexdrive to be genuine
love.
how about lust,
the mechanism that guides
continuation of our
ignorant
species. yes
lust,
thats all I feel for you,
I just want to have sex
and go back to playing
my brainwashing computer game.
and then talk to all my
naive, dumnass friends on
the cute, little chat program.
I have no love.
I am an animal, driven by
urges of conformity and reproduction.
there is no love,
only lust and attachment.

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

1 posted 2003-11-18 04:10 PM

so very true
there is no love in the early years
so look for fun and good times
and be honest

well at least thats what I do

I liked it it holds nothing back

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

2 posted 2003-11-19 07:44 AM

Hmmm... not bad. You seem to have captured the majority of poems on here pretty well.

I am a firm believer in the authority of the ruling class. Especially since I rule.

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

3 posted 2003-11-19 09:29 AM

Ok, there is some truth to what you say in this poem. It's pretty good. Thank you for your BRUTAL honesty about my own poem. I respect that. Keep writing.

-PN-

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2003-11-20 08:48 PM

haha...that poem was great....so true about 99% of poems on here, including mine, but that doesnt take away from some of the talent on here. nice job though....i like the computer games part...haha....
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-11-20 09:39 PM

I think it does take away from the talent. Why write about things EVERY one writes about. It's so boring and dull. I have lust for this writing of yours. Very insightful, and true. Anytime I hear I teenager say I love you. I cringe.
Great point.
I'm interested to see the type of poetry you write. Post more.

~Lex

[This message has been edited by Lexy (11-20-2003 09:40 PM).]

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

6 posted 2003-11-21 01:28 PM

wow! excellent write. i love the whole concept. sounds like some shnit me and my friends would say. ha ha

UnsilencedWords666
Member

since 2003-11-19

Posts 63
Broken Memories & Falling Tears

7 posted 2003-11-24 10:32 PM

When I was reading this I realized that this is the truth, my ex-boyfriend used to use me for the sex and I never ralized it until we broke-up because he always said the "i love you" stuff, and even though I never believed it, it still sounded so nice to hear-so it's great that not all people lie about their intentions...keep up the amazing work :o)

*~*Nessa Bear*~*

Living a normal life is not living a life...it's living for everyone else *~*Nessa Bear*~*

rhyme time
Junior Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 13

8 posted 2003-12-03 10:36 AM

i really didnt like it, but hey im just a whiny bitch, remember

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

9 posted 2003-12-03 05:43 PM

i'm glad you didn't.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

10 posted 2003-12-20 04:33 PM

True. Thats all i have to say. It was sadly true.
~kissa~

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