Teen Poetry #7 |
Sober Eyes |
sometimesitslonely Junior Member
since 2005-12-27
Posts 41USA |
Sober eyes, aren't filled with lies, no hazy cries, or the walks of lines. Sober eyes, fill a void, run and hide, or face the truth. Sober eyes, of cheating disguise, standing of time, and holding of long drives. Sober eyes, how I long, no more sadness, no more fear. This smile is fake, |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
*speachless* wow Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Umm, i liked the general idea but it is a little bit confusing! Either that or it's just me... like the "sober eyes, aren't filled with lies, no hazy cries, or the walks of lines", what's the walks of lines mean in this? I found that what i thought in most of the stanzas was the first half made sense to me the rest didn't :S I liked the title of this though, really fit. I can never seem to find the right title for poems Good job! @-->--- |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Nice write. I agree I don't totally understand the point you were trying to make, but that's why you wrote the poem because it means something to you. Keep up the good work. ~Alli~ |
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BlackEyedBueaty07 Junior Member
since 2006-04-05
Posts 27rittman, ohio |
wow that was very good!! I tottaly understand this poem!! its amazing! wow! -Kerry- new poem of mine-- 'Cant sleep' |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
well i loved it i can relate to it right now. i needed this curiouse |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
I don't understand it but it’s very good *Leah |
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