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Teen Poetry #7

Best friend

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-03-12 07:49 PM

I have given you my heart,
Without asking who you are,
This decision that my heart has taken,
Without thinking who you are,

My heart doesn’t listen to me,
It is pulling me towards you,
Without heeding to me once,

Maybe, I am crazy in love,
But tell me, do you feel the same?
My heart has made up its own mind,

From our brief meeting-
I’ve come to trust u fully,
How did that happen?
Is this a dream?
Or am I in love?

Just think of me as your dream,
That came true,
When our eyes met the first time,
You became there best friend.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

1 posted 2006-03-14 09:47 PM

hmm...
i liked it. good job.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2006-03-17 07:01 PM

I loved this poem so much! I would just suggest changing the 'U' in "I’ve come to trust u fully," to 'you' because it just seems more professional and it's proper english.

But like I said, great write.

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

3 posted 2006-03-25 06:26 AM

wonderfull,
curiouse

[This message has been edited by curiouse (03-25-2006 09:52 AM).]

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