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mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

0 posted 2006-03-12 09:21 AM

I am happy when your around
reborn with every kiss
I long to feel your arms around me
and the soft touch of your lips

I know that its a little soon
to have feelings this intense
I love everything about you
making 'only you' make sense

I dont want to mess this up
or cause you any pain
I only want to make 'us' work
no more stupid games

I haven't felt like this before
you make me feel I'm whole
can't wait to make a life with you
together we'll grow old

I want to be the girl you trust
the one that you can come to
I want to be your everything
because I think... I love you

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-03-12 11:09 AM

It flowed very well. i really liked the all of it. i tryed to think of a certain part i liked above all the rest, but it was too hard. all of this is wonderfull.

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-03-12 02:23 PM

great write

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-03-12 04:37 PM

i liked this one also...

Not as much as i liked the other two i've posted on, but almost as much!

Some of it i hard a little trouble piecing together how it should flow (or how i thought it should flow). All the same, good work!

p.s. do you give lessons? :P lol

@-->---

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2006-03-17 07:13 PM

"I want to be the girl you trust
the one that you can come to
I want to be your everything
because I think... I love you"

Gosh, wow. I can just relate to this part so much, I'm speechless. Awesome write!

~Alli~

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

5 posted 2006-04-04 09:16 AM

this is wonderfull
truly
one of the best poems i ahev read,
curiouse

Curioustity is a fine gift...

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

6 posted 2006-04-04 03:09 PM

Wow, love it.
Great work
I can’t find my favorite part, its to good to only have one.

John O'Driscoll
Junior Member

since 2006-03-13

Posts 43
Sandy, Utah

7 posted 2006-04-07 10:45 AM

Youre really talented! this poem is just as awesome as the last one i read by you. keep it up!

jOhn o.

True happiness is found after you think you have irretrievably lost it

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

8 posted 2006-04-07 05:15 PM

Thank you John and everyone else... I really truely do appreciate all the posts

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