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acid_tears_i_cry Junior Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 24United States, UT |
She was drowning.... With no one in the remote mind to help her... she was doomed!.. Slipping again again under the sea of depression..She held her breath until her lungs felt on fire... Waves of depression splatter against her rocky thoughts... she kept thinking to herslef..."I cant hold out any longer, It's all over...I'm going to die." The pain from her burning lungs and a broken heart was all she could think about. Her curious but yet keen eyes resisted to let go of her own reflection. As time swept by ticking upon every tock... her flesh pulling her own stregth...looking forward to seeing u again...and every weekend after that... Thinking that every mineute with u is like every eon missed.... Saying goodbye has never been harder...Saying goodbye is the last thing Ill choose to do...My briunging heart is craking into ice crystals upon the twinkle in your eyes. And with the last force of strength she has in herself...She whispers to herself hopeing he'll finally listen...I Love You!!! By: Malinda Peterson Can you read the word "loneliness" and not think of a dark room? |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I liked your poem a lot. Just a few spelling errors. other than that it was great. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Intriguing write! Enjoyed reading this. Keep posting.  ~Alli~ |
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