My Fairytale - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

0 posted 2006-03-09 08:03 PM

I almost cried last night,
almost felt a tear drop...
but before I quite understood,
I brought myself to stop.

My heart is saying one thing,
my head tells me another...
my body says something different,
and I don't know why I even bother.

This life is nowhere near fair,
not everyone nkow all...
but I can't help but feel,
like my backs the only one against the wall.

I close my eyes and see a world,
of everyone living happily forever...
but when I open them again,
it's all puzzle pieces that I can't put together.

I don't know how I am supposed to feel,
or how to react to everyone around...
they think they're saying everything clear,
but I can't hear a sound.

So I'll just keep on livin' like nothing's wrong,
just because I don't want to regret...
and one day I'll just turn around,
walk away, and forget.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-03-10 12:29 PM

Ilove the ending. and the rest. nice write.

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-03-10 01:32 AM

Hey,

I really liked your poem.
Mostly I liked how you related it to puzzle pieces, I do that all the time! So now I know I am not the only one out there doing that... I was getting scared! My boyfriend thought I was a quack for thinking that

I sort of feel like your poem jumps around. Like it's confusing in parts, but some how I understood all of it, so why should I be saying it's confusing?? I don't know why, it just "Feels" like it... Wow... I should go to bed!

Good job

The_girl_next_door I am looking forward to more posts from you! So don't you dare stop writing

@-->---

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2006-03-10 11:35 AM

Good job, great write. It flows well and has an imaginative point of view when you talk about opening your eyes. Everything works in your head but not in the real world right? Same here.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

4 posted 2006-03-11 11:29 AM

Hey Everyone.. again I appreciate your comments and I will post more soon.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.