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Teen Poetry #7

White Mist

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

0 posted 2003-11-17 12:08 PM

A man I used to KNOW,
Lies in the soft wet ground.
Lifes intoxicating fumes KILLING his will to live.
He has nothing now,
Not even his tears.
Small pain soothes him.
His vision fills with shadows of kids running through the white mist.
He has lost,
He CAN'T go on.
His heart grieves for joy,
Body aches for peace.
He pulls the trigger,
Angels echoes explode.
Leaving him in a field of white mist
and smiling eyes.

I know you think that I shouldnt still love you
I'll tell you that
But if I didn't say it
Well, I'd still have felt it
Where's the sense in tha

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-17 10:41 AM

....eyes.......

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

2 posted 2003-11-19 10:37 AM

Ooooooooo I LOVED this poem! Every single word of it. A word of advice though; I wrote a poem similiar to this and one of the mods told me that it was inappropriate for this forum and took it out. So, just watch it! LOL. But it was awesome and thanks for sharing! Keep it up!

~J.Lynn

**To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.**

[This message has been edited by BabieDoll (11-19-2003 10:38 AM).]

THE-1-U-DISLIKE
Junior Member

since 2003-11-07

Posts 20

3 posted 2003-11-19 11:06 AM

what a great words u have to discripe ur feeling

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