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neil.gd
Junior Member

since 2006-02-27

Posts 16
southern leyte, philippines

0 posted 2006-03-02 03:32 AM

i heard a boy calling
in the dark room of the shadow

i heard him shouting for so long
but not one wants to listen

i heard him grinding his teeth
it is because of anger i think

but no one dares to listen to him...

meaningless, a comment of all
for the truth is hard to reveal
sounds funny to listen but hurting
for the souls hiding in fake smiles

a teardrop of the boy starts to fall
but no one came to wipe it

until he stops and silence came
there everyone was astonish

silence is still there
feels like hunting to everyone

but the boy did not talk at all...

meaningless, still they utter
for keeping emotions is not right
a big fake smile is still in the top
than to keep inside what is in your mind

a big fake world there may be
for a boy who could not understand
what is right or wrong...
to speak in the silence or
to be silent in a crowded place.

hehehe... hope you like it...
the first time i post a poem..

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

1 posted 2006-03-02 03:42 PM

I really enjoyed this! You captured the theme of isolation and loneliness very well. Oh and welcome to Pip!

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-03-02 07:46 PM

I like this poem alot. I like the way you set it. I found it easily read. Thanks for posting it i hope to hear some more from you like this.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

neil.gd
Junior Member

since 2006-02-27

Posts 16
southern leyte, philippines

3 posted 2006-03-02 11:11 PM

thanks for the appreciation...

heheh

i do hope others will like it..

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

4 posted 2006-03-04 11:07 PM

welcome to pip. good job. i like it. I have something like that maybe i'll post it sometime.

Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

neil.gd
Junior Member

since 2006-02-27

Posts 16
southern leyte, philippines

5 posted 2006-03-05 11:07 PM

thank you...for appreciating my work

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