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Ethan M. O'Callahan
New Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 7

0 posted 2006-02-27 02:52 PM

falling into to an unbreakable pattern
where life makes the worst
and the best never matters
it's seems like everything has gone straight to hell
now they must be dead
just look from where they fell

a late night, the most memorable times
where the clock goes to quick
and love grows like vines
its been a while since I've been able to say
that the sun set late tonight
just to lengthen the day

so I write
all these songs
to make right
from the wrong
beautiful girl
what happened to you
did my love
finally crack
letting the world get through
now you're a mess
and there's nothing to say
there's no way to go back
and its killing me

slowly broken into eternal silence
my mind is playing tricks
as I wander towards violence
analyzing every word just to see what you say
if i had the chance
i would restart the day

black clouds mount in the sky
they're coming on quicker
than can be seen by our eyes
they're spitting rain and it ruins the day
it's all right because
I can't be with you either way

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-02-27 05:53 PM

Wow! I loved it. This is my first comment on any poems on the site. I've been reading poems for about a month and just joined yesterday.
I love how this poem shows how one thing can relate to another and how you know what went wrong but it doesn't matter anymore. I've been in some situations like this. This was a great right. Can't wait to read more.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-02-27 05:57 PM

Hey. I posted a reply but it didn't show up.
So here I am again. I love this poem. The only thing I could think of when reading it was 'wow'
great write and I hope to hear more from you.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

3 posted 2006-02-27 10:10 PM

Wow! wonderful. Welcome to pip. you poem is great. very nice job

            xoxo
           Jessica
              :)

       Where your heart lays
        is where you belong.

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