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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2006-07-09 12:40 PM

you've got it made,
don't you babe?
with a knife in the arm and and a scar
across your breast,
you're beginning to look like a halloween pirate.
growl a bit for me sugar so i can
see you grit those teeth and hear the dirt
grinding about like so much gravel.
every worde you speak is a piece of rubber left at the stake of the road:
breath like a burning carcass and voice as a last warning before
failure.
you're a testament to us all and the bounds
we lay
in our paths.
someone should build a monument to your obscenities.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

1 posted 2006-07-09 02:44 AM

1. DO you mean word not worde?

2. Don't you think this topic would recieve responses if it was posted in the Dark forums?

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-07-09 02:52 PM

young_blood..

1. I liked this.. it was not as great as your other ones but I did enjoy reading it and learning from it in a way.

2. I can say that you might get more post if you post this in dark passions but then again, I don't visit that part of the site much and I love your poetry. So, I might miss some of yours if you always posted it in dark passions. (laughing silently)

3. Thanks for sharing.

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-07-10 11:27 AM

Well, really… okay, here we go…

1. I have no idea why we are talking with numbers but it’s rather interesting?
2. I also liked this poem, not exactly my favorite, favorite, by you but it was unique in some ways. I liked the comparison, in the title, to the story in the poem it was rather neat.
3. Please don’t start posting in dark poetry, as selfish as this may sound, I also do not go to dark very much and I’d hate to miss reading some of your poems.
4.I really liked the ending line in this poem, for some reason that part really stuck out to me. And yes, thank you for sharing once again. I can’t wait to see more

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hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-07-10 09:38 PM

1) this is cool the number thing not the poem.
2) as for the poem cool wouldn't even begin to describe it WOW i loved it
3)i agree with stargal please don't post in dark poetry cause i don't go there very much either and i've always loved your poetry b/c they are full of meaning good job i mean it too....
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

oh_my_goshijustgotexcited
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 52
USA, IDAHO

5 posted 2006-07-12 03:37 AM

wow i liked this poem a lot! a lot, a lot! could have used a lil more something, but i dunno what! wow..that rhymed, lol the point is you are very talented, just keep writing!

Viola

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