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josephine
New Member

since 2006-01-11

Posts 5
Ohio, US

0 posted 2006-01-12 09:46 PM

stop trying to save me
and make my problems yours
i'm a big girl now
i can do my own chores

from cleaning the carpet
to disenfecting my wrists
i can do it on my own
without your good luck wish

don't mistake my painfilled screams
as selfish cries for help
it's just a mating call
for someone unlike yourself

my words may be a mistake
but a beautiful one at that
i've been waiting quite a while
to have this little chat

if ever my eyes are sad
don't question them, they do their job well
and don't try to brighten them
i don't want them lying about what they tell

i have this dream you see
to someday be released from my pain
but in order to reach this day
you've got to first let me live in vain

so call in the dogs
and stop apologizing
it doesn't matter if your sorry
just as long as your not crying

i'll be here when you return
i've got no where else to stay
but i wish you'd go now
take the chance to make my day

i'll reason with you
and explain this someday
but for now just leave me
and let me have my way

-Josie

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

1 posted 2006-01-13 12:41 PM

very emotion felt piece... eyes will never lie though... excellent first post welcome to PiP

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

layla
Member

since 2000-11-19

Posts 74

2 posted 2006-01-13 09:32 PM

I like the way this flows
I thought the eye thing was very clever
I felt this one

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

3 posted 2006-01-13 11:39 PM

Welcome To Passions

This is a great first post.. I look forward to reading many more of your words in the future!!Check your e-mail for a special surprise!!

"...and as we drift along, I never fail to be astounded by the things we'll do for promises..."
Ronnie James Dio www.impressionsintime.net

littlelauren
Junior Member

since 2005-12-30

Posts 25

4 posted 2006-01-14 05:13 PM

An amaizing first poem! welcome to pip!!! if u cnt find nefing to rhyme let it go abit longer til u cn.. very gd though! i luv it! keep it up!

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

5 posted 2006-01-15 10:04 AM

i have this dream you see
to someday be released from my pain
but in order to reach this day
you've got to first let me live

good one

Love me for who i m

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