Teen Poetry #7 |
I Dream |
kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Note: The spoken "flow" is a bit unique, it is intended to be that way. I Dream swift through night soaring but softly crossing the light of darkness, casting a shadow on the peril of my past, shallow dreams i know not but my foe of divinity has cast the die, it seems, this nether is but a lie for my fate has already met its end |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow.. I am very impressed. Great first post.. this was a wonderful start to the site.. I love your choice of words and the last line was a great ending. I can somewhat see where you were coming from with this one.. GREAT JOB!!! WELCOME TO PIP!! I hope you like it here as much as I have. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Hey Heather Thanks for the feedback. |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I agree with the above. Great first post(much better than mine was I'm sure lol) and very sophisticated. O and of course Welcome to PIPTALK! Hope to see more! <3Erin myspace username-beautiful_tragidy |
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kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Thanks Erin, I love feedback |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey kin3tix, Sorry that I'm so late in posting a reply to this! but I wanted to say welcome to pip and I hope you enjoy the site as much as I have Btw, I have to agree with everything said before me, this is one awesome poem! You have such an amazing way with words. It's simply amazing... And yeah, this was better than my first post too! lolz... Great write on this one, I can't wait to see more @-->--- |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wowee i loved it..... very gud 4 your first post too..... i liked it and am looking fwd to reading more of your poems 2.... welcome to PIP!!!!! hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Thanks guys for the feedback. Now... to findsome inspiration for my next poem |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
very nice poem i really liked it flowed very well! thanks for the read! hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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