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brokenheart15
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since 2005-12-16
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indiana

0 posted 2005-12-27 02:34 PM


I try to forget your name
I try to forget your face
I try to forget the past
cuz its such a big disgrace

I try to move on
I try to find someone new
I try to do things
that keep my mind off of you

I try to forgive
I try to forget
I try to find love
but my hearts full of regret

the past cant be erased
it will always be there
Reminding me of you
and hoping that you'll care



© Copyright 2005 Samantha - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2005-12-27 06:09 PM


Welcome! what a very nice first presentation!
Some people are unforgettable.

ENJOY your stay at Passions!

Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
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Wandering
2 posted 2005-12-27 09:54 PM


Welcome to PiP!

I like this. You pulled off the repetition nicely. I think the poem would be improved if you worked on the third stanza or cut it out all together.

Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing.

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Sexy
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since 2005-11-25
Posts 53

3 posted 2005-12-28 12:24 PM


NICE 1st write......Welcome to PiP

eternal_echobassplayer
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since 2005-12-28
Posts 12
Tx, USA
4 posted 2005-12-29 01:00 PM


This is a really good poem. I like it a lot!! Stay strong.
teedles
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since 2005-12-28
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VA, USA
5 posted 2005-12-30 11:04 PM


I can relate with your words! Sometimes you don't forget, you just learn to live on!  Good Job!!

Never discourage anyone...who continually makes progress, no matter how slow. - Plato

Christioned
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since 2004-01-15
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Huddling in the dark
6 posted 2005-12-31 10:32 PM


Nice first post welcome to Pip. Normally I'm not one to like repetative poems; but every now and then someone pulls it off and it is good. Congradulations. Keep up the good work!

"It's my curse to constantly be in battle with Him."- Me

littlelauren
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since 2005-12-30
Posts 25

7 posted 2006-01-01 09:31 AM


thats amazing, I hope u cn forget soon!
Lauren
xxxx

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Saluting with misty eyes
8 posted 2006-01-01 10:20 AM


Welcome to PIP!!!!!!

Please check your e-mail for a special surprise.

"...and as we drift along, I never fail to be astounded by the things we'll do for promises..."
Ronnie James Dio

intention
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since 2005-11-13
Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA
9 posted 2006-01-02 08:04 AM


good one
welcome to pip..
shilpii

Love me for who i m

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
10 posted 2006-01-08 12:24 PM


i agree w/ savage about the third stanza but  the poem is really good.~Laura

how did you break my heart when it wasn't whole to start?

aol sn- tearsoflove13762

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