Teen Poetry #7 |
Leather Sofas In A Hotel Lobby |
young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Leather Sofas In a Hotel Lobby There’s a rushing of water somewhere out east. But it’s of no matter, I’m not quite sure of its purity. The impurity does give it some flavor though, doesn’t it. If we were flawless, would we even know? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
If you go on the belief that flawless=perfection then no we wouldn't know because we wouldn't know imperfection or having flaws. Right? "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Yeah, but even if we were flawless, we could invent flaws that don't exist, Right? So perfection itself could be flawed,in our eyes, kind of like the opposite of rose-colored glasses. I dont know. Thanks for the ideas, Alex. Enjoyed, yet again. <3kerR When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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eternal_echobassplayer Junior Member
since 2005-12-28
Posts 12Tx, USA |
hmmm....this one was different...however very interesting... I liked it! |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
good food for thought in this one... who's eyes was the concept of perfection founded through? and who is that person to the rest of us anyway...hmmm anyway excellent write again my friend, much enjoyed peace Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
i think if we were flawless we wouldnt take the chance and "drink" of it. we would know to stay away or we would decide to "drink" and then we would no longer be flawless how did you break my heart when it wasn't whole to start? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"But it’s of no matter, I’m not quite sure of its purity. The impurity does give it some flavor though, doesn’t it." I might rephrase this, m'self, because the logic is well, flawed. I think I would change the second sentence to state: "An impurity would give it some flavor though, wouldn't it." because the first sentence acknowledges no knowledge of purity or impurity. But then, that's just me. smile...it wouldn't matter to me if I'd been deemed perfect. A true obsessive-compulsive, I'd polish anyway. Much enjoyed this. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
good catch there. i like your suggestion. |
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