Teen Poetry #7 |
Memories...after additions |
CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
She took in a deep breath Late into this endless night Wondering which of her memories She was made to write Those that burned her soul, That forced her heart to bleed Or those of love and lust Or the times of friends in need Memories of times Where life was simple as could be ...Keeping this all in mind She drowned herself in memories… Moments of pain and sorrow Flashed before her eyes As she lied on her bed Breathing out slow sighs. A fight with a former friend Another’s early wake Skinning her knee as a child And a boyfriend who was fake Seventeen years of memories Flooded her brain that night And she stared at a blank paper wondering which to write Who am I? She thought What do I have to say? What single defining moment Has made me this way? Bringing her pen to paper She started her life’s tale, Writing only truths about her Whether success or fails And it was in this quick motion While writing happiness and tears That she had finally realized The impact of her years… "I am a history book Without a finished end I am a human story... One unable to be penned.” |
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AtLsHawTy17 Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60IL, |
WOW that was awesome good write i like your work Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
damn, another brilliant piece. i really enjoy your work, you have a very keen creative sense about emotions and what not. You have this knack for expressing how you feel in the most profound ways, bravo. "Do not go gentle into that good night, |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Hey you!! Glad to see your still writing!! Your poetry is amazing as always! Loved reading this and i looke forward to more!! |
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Sexy Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 53 |
I love your writing it makes me feel as if it were me writing it but its in a deeper thought |
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4christ13 New Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 4Georgia, United States |
This is some good work. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
the ending was strong , i liked that good work chika ~wolfie And it was in this quick motion While writing happiness and tears That she had finally realized The impact of her years… |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Thanks a lot guys!...and actually, I'm wondering. Young_blood(Alex), if you read this, could you take the time to post...I really want to hear what you think about some of my stuff. At last check, you thought I was lame, and un-creative, to put it into layman's terms. Thanks so much guys...You're awesome, as always! <3love, always. <3<3 ker When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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I_heart_rock Junior Member
since 2005-11-26
Posts 10 |
i read ur first draft and i thought tht was great but it only got better...tht was a great writing...ur really good -Jess |
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DejaEntendu Member
since 2005-12-06
Posts 82Pennsylvania |
great poem. It reminds me of those nights where I may go to bed, but feeling unfulfilled, and I just lay awake, wondering about anything that comes to mind. Great Job |
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