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Have You Ever...? |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Have you ever fallen in love Then wanted to die? Have you ever watched a movie Then wanted to cry? Have you ever had a friend Then wanted to lie? Have you ever been hurt so badly Then wanted to try? Have you ever noticed life's lessons Then wondered why? Kinda short, but I like how it came out, tell me what you think I can do to improve it cuz I don't think it's really good yet. ~*~Karen~*~ |
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misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
hmmm. Love the rhymes and different emotions. Try and put more feeling into it. Like love, sorrow etc... I know you can do anything if you wanted to. ^_^  |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
hmmmm, i...dont.....know..... |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I can't think of any suggestions right now, but you're off to a good start!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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