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December Song
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December Song |
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smalltownmind Junior Member
since 2003-10-24
Posts 21 |
this is unfinished...i'll post the rest when i'm finished ... i was at home this weekend and i was playing the piano (though i dont know how to play very much...just some chords) and i wrote this at about 3 in the morning...in my opinion it is just beautiful on the piano with the vocals and everything....maybe it's kind of weak but i nearly cried writing it. haha. enjoy December Song Breathing in, the air is cold and i'm feeling so alone... without you, I can't move... and i cant even think of living without you. Mist is falling from the air like tiny snowflakes in your hair the sun is gone and winter is here i feel alone though you're standing right there... in front of me...i just can't reach and i can't carry my heart that far Across the mile...to see you smile... and i just can't wait for December. The red-orange glow you used to love has faded away and our dreams are gone... you're so high...you can't see me i'm so low...i'm beneath me Now October has come and i am one at peace with myself...i'm broken with you... December was always our song... then January came and i can't see you... in front of me...i just can't reach and i can't carry my heart that far Across the mile...to see you smile... and i just can't wait for December. Remember...how you made me laugh... through your past...just try to think back... the sun was warm on your face... now i've found a place...it's safe here... you can't hurt me anymore... But Decemeber will be here before you know and i'll be there again. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I like it, it seems like it would be a really good song when it's finished, can't wait til you post the finished copy ~*~Karen~*~ |
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misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
I just looooove poems about love. I hope to read more poems from you soon!!!  |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
I think the beginning of this was really good, can't wait to see the end  -ash I know you think that I shouldnt still love you |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
yes...yes...i remember.... |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I think what you have so far is really good! Hope to see it when you post the rest of it. I liked it....made me think of a couple of things in my life.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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LiL-Jew Junior Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 30 |
that is so cool, girl you gotta keep writing, that took me back into time. keep it up. |
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smalltownmind Junior Member
since 2003-10-24
Posts 21 |
*notes the copywrite name is Eric......guy  |
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