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Teen Poetry #7

well kept reality

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2005-08-04 01:00 AM

mascara runs
with a bitter smile
as she roams
a lonely isle
rainy thoughts
flood her mind
sweet temptation
one of a kind
thoughts flow free
yet kept inside
in this reality
her soul has died
dont talk
dont sleep
dont eat
just keep
it all bottled in
show them all
be tough
dont let them see you fall

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-08-04 09:21 AM

I can really relate to this...really...

well done!

Cloud 9
Senior Member

since 2004-11-05

Posts 980
Ca

2 posted 2005-08-04 05:29 PM

Exactly!!

Sometimes this kind of stuff hurts..

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

3 posted 2005-08-04 05:34 PM

I've been there.
You conveyed the emotion very well.

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

4 posted 2005-08-06 09:30 PM

I loved it- it's going into my library. It's just one of those that reaches right to the core and pulls.

Should "free" be "freely?"

Thanks for sharing.

www.livejournal.com/users/alimakins

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

5 posted 2005-08-06 09:52 PM

yeah pretty much everyone has been here, but you words still make it a poignant piece. overall i liked it.

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

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